Request feedback on new Healing Tao Mission statement

This is great; in the past you have been one of the few I have seen for a Renaissance of Western World Qigong. I wish this could be incorporated somehow so people would understand with clarity the difference of a Qigong Movement that is unique to non- Asian Speaking Students. This is for sure a appealing factor due to the paradigm shift of consciousness from the days of old, of Chinese Master, Sifu Et Cetra….to a Western Community Movement that has no barrier’s of Race, Creed, Gender.

Would these five Mission points have any explanations on why they are? Thats my first snapshot two cents..SnowLion

Brace yourself because this is gonna be harsh.

I think you’re out of your mind. I think you should come back to earth and try to communicate with people instead of making up a vocabulary that no one else (and perhaps you) don’t understand.

See below:

1. Embody Tao principles of Natural Unity [WHAT DOES THAT MEAN, I MEAN REALLY? IT SOUNDS ALL NICE AN NEW AGE-EY, BUT WHAT ARE YOU TALKING ABOUT? NATURAL UNITY? SHEESH], Balance, & Harmony.
Surrender to Life Force flow [SAME COMMENT. “LIFE FORCE FLOW” — WHAT IS THAT AND WHY WOULD ANYONE WANT TO SURRENDER TO IT] as Original Nature [SAME COMMENT. “LIFE FORCE FLOW AS ORIGINAL NATURE” WHOLLY OBSCURE. IS THAT YOUR POINT – TO BE OBSCURE?], Yin-Yang & Five-Phases [I THINK YOUR USE OF “AS” IN THIS SENTENCE IS WRONG].

2. Develop a heart-centered Human Energy Science [A BIT DIPPY BUT BETTER. WHAT OTHER KIND OF SCIENCE WOULD IT BE IF NOT HUMAN? ALSO, WHY DO YOU INSIST ON CALLING IT SCIENCE? IS IT SOME SORT OF INSECURITY OF YOURS? ALMOST NOTHING YOU DO IS SUBJECT TO ANYTHING THAT COULD REMOTELY BE CALLED SCIENTIFIC METHOD. HOW ABOUT “HEART CENTERED ENERGY PRACTICES”?] to benefit all.
Cultivate love and trust in the Life Force [THERE’S THAT LIFE FORCE AGAIN. MAYBE YOU SHOULD DEFINE IT UP FRONT SO PEOPLE NO WHAT YOU’RE TALKING ABOUT AND DON’T THINK YOU’RE JUST SPOUTING VAGUE SPIRITUAL SOUNDING STUFF — “USE THE FORCE LUKE!” ] via Qigong & Inner Alchemy.

3. Accept unconditionally the process of Physical Embodiment. [AGAIN, WHAT THE HELL DOES THAT MEAN?]
Awaken radiant sexual health & whole-body enlightenment. [WHY ARE YOU PLUGGING SEX, PARTICULARY SINCE YOU ALWAYS SAY IT’S OVER-EMPHASIZED IN THIS SYSTEM? ALSO, WE’RE AWAKENING SEXUAL HEALTH BUT NOT GENERAL HEALTH? WHO KNOWS WHAT “ENLIGHTENMENT” MEANS, LET ALONE “WHOLE BODY ENLIGHTENMENT”. HOW ABOUT TRANSFORMATION? WHICH, WHILE STILL VAGUE, IS LESS VAGUE AND MORE ACCURATE.

4. Release struggle, [ONE DOESN’T RELEASE STUGGLE. ONE RELEASES TENSION, PAIN, ANGER, ETC (ALL OF WHICH MAY BE THE RESULT OF STUGGLE). ONE PERHAPS STOPS STUGGLING, OR LESSENS STRUGGLE. BUT THEN YOU’D HAVE TO, AGAIN, SAY WHAT THE HELL YOU WERE TALKING AOBUT. WHAT STUGGLE? ] follow the Way of Effortless Completion. [IF I HADN’T READ ALL OF THE ABOVE GARBAGE I’D SAY “EFFORTLESS COMPLETION” IS RIDICULOUSLY VAGUE. BUT AT THIS POINT IT’S LOOKING PRETTY GOOD] Express creativity & focus free will to shape our soul’s unique destiny. [DOESN’T REALLY GO WITH THE REST OF THE PARAGRAPH]

5. Individuate the whole, true, original, and Immortal Self. [COME ON “INDIVIDUATE THE SELF”? CAN’T YOU TRY NOT TO SOUND OBSCURE AND POMPOUS? EVERYONE VIEWS THE SELF IN INDIVIDUAL TERMS. WHAT ARE YOU TRYING TO SAY?] Integrate our personal heart-mind with all levels of Greater Self. [YOU THINK PUTTING GREATER SELF IN INITIAL CAPITALS MEANS SOMETHING? NO ONE KNOWS WHAT YOU MEAN BY GREATER SELF. IT SOUNDS COOL BUT MEANS NOTHING (IS THAT WHAT YOU’RE MISSION STATEMENT IS ABOUT?). FRANKLY, “HEART-MIND” IS A BIT OF A STRETCH BUT IT’S THE LEAST OF YOUR WORRIES.

I could go on but I won’t. Throw it in the garbage and start over. Pretend you’re talking to a high school business student whose never heard of heart mind, soul completion, greater heaven or any other fancy and largely undefined terms that you like to bandy about. Just tell him simply, in words he can understand, what these practices will do for him. If you can’t do that, you’ve got no business teaching this stuff or writing a mission statement.

You did ask.

IMO, mission statements need to be clear and concise. Your proposed mission statements are vaguely worded and difficult to understand. If you’re trying to reach the general public, you can’t use jargon; the high school business school student as target reader sounds right to me also. If you’re trying to reach people with a background in the general field, then you need much greater precision in your statements. If you’ll pardon a bad pun: KISS* it, it will make it better.

-Michael
* I’m assuming the acronym is known, but I hate assuming: Keep It Simple Stupid.

i do feel like the points in themselves, in their essential meaning, are quite wonderful and important in what they emphasize.

I think michael’s mission statement is already a very, very condensed (refined!) version of a large body of concepts. I included the basic points that I thought each section of the mission statement boiled down to, and will list them again. I think you might be confusing a “Mission statement” with an “introductory explanation” type of thing, which is different. Why should a mission statement have to pander to a non-experienced person? I think it makes more sense to have it be a complete description of what the organizations intention is rather than a “nice explanation”.

Just out of curiosity, is it:

1) the concepts you disagree with,

2) the statements are confusing to someone who doesn’t understand the concepts, or

3) the concepts are presented in an unclear way?

I find nothing fundamentally wrong with this statement, and much good.

I don’t remember exactly, but I was fond of the idea–which I seem to remember was in the first mission statement–of what I recall as an idea of openness to other points of view (i.e., different spiritual traditions not dissimilar to daoism). This attracted me at that time.

Simon